tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post7627718097655322909..comments2024-02-01T22:39:49.779+13:00Comments on Bigger Than Ben Hur: Tuesday Poem: "The Last Fluke" Ben Hurhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08367615722744097913noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post-58255329000770712742014-03-11T21:43:07.461+13:002014-03-11T21:43:07.461+13:00Thanks, Rethabile, for your cogent appreciation an...Thanks, Rethabile, for your cogent appreciation and critique.Ben Hurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08367615722744097913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post-77212719035451702862014-03-06T23:26:52.416+13:002014-03-06T23:26:52.416+13:00WTF! I'm sorry there are people like Md. Your ...WTF! I'm sorry there are people like Md. Your poem evokes a theme that is dear to me. But the mangled version is a true horror. Again, I'm sorry. Your opening line is remarkable, and the rest follows suit. <br /><br />Ay my first reading, I read this line: "its siren song forever tattooed upon our genome," as "its siren song forever tattooed upon our program." Asking myself why, I realised I would have said "program" instead of "genome" because the latter is too constricted, too particular, and I'd want my readers to decide what program it was (even though it'd still be evident it was the human program). it takes nothing from your words, and I apologise again for the thieves in our midst.Rethabilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03523368313680103826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post-81532139085516032532014-02-27T15:34:14.305+13:002014-02-27T15:34:14.305+13:00Avoid the person above this comment, Md Amirul Isl...Avoid the person above this comment, Md Amirul Islam. I don't follow him , never heard of him until now, and when I checked out his blog, he'd stolen my poem and posted it as his and changed lots of the original text. I was angry to say the least and let him know in no uncertain terms. Here is his mangled theft:<br /><br />“The Last Fluke”<br /><br />The sea was at one time lover to the land,<br /> Cuddling it with kisses<br /> Revolves it with passion.<br /> The sea soughed us au courant the bring,<br /> its siren call forever tattooed au courant our genome.<br />LOVE SHORT MESSAGES<br /> From its deep bosom it produced malachite graves,<br /> chiselled away reef and breaking wind<br /> and sacrificed in fragments of Andrew D. White<br /> to the beaches of the cosmos.<br /> And from this depths our cetacean mammal siblings<br /> Babbled out to U.S. government, but we had<br /> Buried their lyric nomenclature.<br /> Even so their forgiveness never waned<br /> Just as the last colossus tail good fortune<br /> farewelled us as it dipped<br /> into the cauldron of poisonous substance we had produced.<br />Ben Hurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08367615722744097913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post-59957581767143925662014-02-26T20:54:26.582+13:002014-02-26T20:54:26.582+13:00I agree with Alicia -- hope this is not a glimpse ...I agree with Alicia -- hope this is not a glimpse of the future. I like the mournful tone of this, and the connection we can feel between land and see, us and them. Michelle Elvyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503119577895402738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post-54387516008870588552014-02-25T23:44:06.948+13:002014-02-25T23:44:06.948+13:00cheers Andrew, good to see your environmental poem...cheers Andrew, good to see your environmental poem (and the great piccies) I just hope it's not prophetic. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07421892624282503387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8812366260875678630.post-67623892376366454312014-02-25T20:40:02.785+13:002014-02-25T20:40:02.785+13:00Hi Andrew,
wonderful creatures aren't they...l...Hi Andrew,<br />wonderful creatures aren't they...like this bit <br />'but we had <br /><br />forgotten their lyric language.'<br /><br />Great photos too.Helen McKinlayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18429062682694815734noreply@blogger.com